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A ****** Summer

Irena here! It's my first fanfic of ****** and I hope you all like it! It's rated G-PG!

ENJOY!

Chapter One: The Surprise


****** fell out of his bed, stupidly falling over his things on the floor and hitting his closet. Rubbing his head and saying ‘ow!’ repeatedly until the sensation stopped, he stood up and grabbed his clothes and pulled them on. ****** stumbled into a room that had ramen.

“RAMEN! My favorite thing next to Sakura!” ****** yelled grabbing the bowl and gulping it down.

****** ran outside and walked into Sasuke. ****** looked at Sasuke and started to run again. Sasuke just looked and shook his head at ****** and started to walk again.

“******, where is Sasuke?” Sakura asked sternly seeing him coming to her and waiting for Kakashi Sensei.

****** just shrugged and started to lean against wood until it broke. He stumbled and fell down.

Sakura looked at ******, “******! GET UP!” she yelled.

POOF! Kakashi poofed on a tree limb right above ****** who was lying on the ground. “Sakura, where is Sasuke?” Kakashi said in his low voice.

“Ask idiot over here.” Sakura said pointing to ******.

Sasuke poofed right next to Sakura, he was smirking seeing ****** on the ground.

“What did you need us for Sensei?” Kakashi looked down at Sakura.

“Well, we are having a break. No missions for a while. I am also treating everyone to a sort of ‘vacation’. We are going to the beach and relaxing.” Kakashi said.

Sakura squealed and jumped up and down. ****** shot straight from the ground and up at Kakashi.

“So we are having a vacation?” Kakashi nodded and sighed.

“We will meet here tomorrow to leave.” Sakura smiled widely and left to her room to pack. ****** just screamed like a little girl and went home to pack.

“Sasuke, try not to use your sharigun on this trip.” Kakashi said staring down at him. Sasuke left silently nodding. POOF! Kakashi left shaking his head in dismay.

“I can’t wait!” Sakura said jumping out of her bed smiling.

She grabbed her normal clothes,her suitcase, and sandals. She went out the door too excited to even think. Sakura ran down the village to the spot where they were yesterday.

‘CHA! I get to see Sasuke in board shorts!’ Inner Sakura said.

Sakura waited about an hour until ****** came and sat down smiling at Sakura seeing if she was wearing her bathing suit yet. Sakura looked around to see where Sasuke could be. POOF! Sasuke and Kakashi came about the same time like last time and they both wore their normal clothes. Disappointed Sakura turned to see Kakashi.

“So where is the plane or how are we getting there?”

“By plane of course.” Kakashi mumbled buried in his book.

“Let’s walk over to the village's airport.” (O_o I know there isn’t a village airport…but that’s ok!) The four of them walked on silently and ready to have finally a vacation.

Sasuke had a small bag with barely anything in it. ****** had a bulging orange duffle bag and Sakura had a pink perfect suitcase. Kakashi had his normal backpack, it was also bulging.

“Well, here we are.” Kakashi said standing in front of a large building with big words that ****** couldn’t even understand.

“Let’s go already! I don’t want to miss the rays!” Sakura said smiling at the airport.

She started to run up but got caught by Kakashi.

“Sakura wait.” Kakashi warned and walked up to a desk at the airport.

“The four of us are going.” He said to the girl at the counter.

Sakura sweatdropped, “Sasuke, what are you going to do there?”

“Nothing.”

“Do you swim?”

Sasuke looked at her and then looked at his bag.

“Yes, I do.”

“Let’s go swimming together! All four of us.” Sakura said examining her sandals.

****** smiled, “I can go in with you if Sasuke doesn’t want to,” ****** said looking at Sakura.

“Let’s go ******, Sasuke and Sakura. The plane is waiting for us,” Kakashi said pointing to the gate.

He walked in and he looked around for ‘First Class’.

“We are in First Class. It will all be to us. Make sure you don’t eat a lot because I am taking us out to dinner. It would probably be a good idea if you didn’t throw up while we are in the air.”

Kakashi was strutting to the ‘First Class’ seating area and sat in one of the silk chairs. He took out his book, ‘Icha Icha Paradise’ and began to read. ****** walked in amazement and jumped in a seat. Sakura walked in and put her suitcase in one seat and sat next to it. Sasuke sat alone in one of the corner chairs and took out a scroll and a pen and began to write something. ****** laughed and smiled jumping up and down.

“Passengers, we are now taking off. Please fasten your seatbelts and we will lift off in 5..4..3..2..1!”

The plane went forward and into the air. Sasuke looked out the window in search of something to do and put away his scroll and pen. Sakura took out a magazine and started to read a bit until Hatake Kakashi broke the silence.

“How about I teach you a lesson on the way of shinobi? We won’t fight here but I can surely show you.”

“How? We are flying about 1000 or more feet above the ground. How can you teach us?” Sakura explained.

“We can get out of our seats,” everything was quiet…

“Only for a while. Sakura, Sasuke, and ******, did you want to be taught or not?” Kakashi said standing up from his seat with ‘Come Come Paradise’ in his hand.

Kakashi looked at them. Sakura put down her magazine and stood up.

“Sensei, what can you teach us?”

Kakashi laughed, “I can teach you about anything. I will need someone’s kunai.”

Sakura threw Kakashi her kunai and grabbed her spare in her back pouch.

“I’m sure you’ve all seem to have to hang of kunai but what if,”

Kakashi grabbed Sasuke’s arm and held the kunai at his throat.

“What if I was to do this and I was a ‘real bad guy’, what would you have done?”

Kakashi looked at Sakura.

“Well?” Kakashi tightened his grip and Sasuke yelled out in pain.

“Sasuke, this will only be a couple of seconds,” Kakashi said looking at him.

“I don’t know.” Sakura whispered, her eyes wide with fear.

****** grabbed his own kunai and threw it at Sasuke. Sasuke grabbed the kunai with his mouth and broke free of Kakashi’s grip.

“That is why I must teach you Sakura. You won’t be able to do anything if a loved one is going to be killed if you do something to that person. When something like that happens act fast like ****** did. ****** threw his own kunai to make a threat to see if I was going to kill Sasuke, but in the same time, he made it like it was going for me and instead it was for Sasuke to break free. Also when a ninja just says ‘I don’t know’ it would mean to the person in need that they think you don’t care. If they think you don’t care, then they should just die. Never say that,” Kakashi finally concluded.

Sakura nodded, she looked at Sasuke who was handing ****** back his kunai. Sasuke sat back in his chair and started to stare out the window again. Kakashi sensei looked at ******,

“******, if I was to do this what would you do?” Kakashi grabbed Sakura and laid her down on the ground and pulled her arm.

She screamed in agony. Sasuke looked up at the commotion, ****** looked at Kakashi. Kakashi had put his book down and ****** had his kunai out again.

“SHADOW CLONE JUTSU!” five ******’s were attacking Kakashi.

Kakashi jumped back every time and poofing each ****** clone back to ****** himself. Kakashi took out his kunai and put right next to Sakura’s neck and she squirmed to get back at Kakashi but it was no use.

Kakashi let go and looked at ******, “I don’t think you are getting the concept ******. We are on a plane; I don’t think the pilot would like clones of you running around. Please refrain from doing that.”

Sakura rubbed her arm in pain and stood waiting for instructions.

“Sasuke, you're next.” Kakashi grabbed Sakura yet again pulling on her and Sakura screaming in agony but this time he had his kunai at Sakura.

Sasuke jumped up and grabbed his kunai and shuriken, throwing them at Kakashi hitting the floor as Kakashi missed each time. Sasuke thought fast and made a quick movement to Sakura and pulled her out of Kakashi’s grip with Kakashi not even noticing. Kakashi grabbed Sasuke and Sakura was let go and fell to ******’s feet. ****** grabbed his shuriken and attacked Kakashi and he let go of Sasuke. Sasuke stumbled but got up. Sakura sat back in her seat rubbing her arms.

“Now we should be arriving soon. Make sure your ready,” Kakashi said looking out the window and sitting back in his seat.

Next Chapter will be out soon!

~ IM ~
 
I liked it, but I would have liked if there was more. Obviously, I can't wait till the next chapter is released!
 
Irena, I know for a fact that you've never traveled via airplane. XD No knives or weapons are allowed on an airplane XD

Kakashi and the others would probably be kicked off the airplane if they even flashed a weapon. Also, no shouting permitted. And where are the flight attendants? (sp!?)

no standing or walking around 'till the blinky seat belt sign-thingy turns off.

there's also no room to have a pretend fight in an airplace, even if you're in first class. In all the first class accomidations (SP!?) I've ever seen, basically you just get bigger seats.

unless it's a cargo plane, then Kakashi would have more training room and it would seem more realistic. They're ninjas! What do they need with extra pillows and blankets!?

Oh, and all the announcements would have been done on the intercom thingy. And ******'s hardly left the village, much less ever gone onto an airplane! Make him more excited! I can just see him, like a little kid, kneeling on his seat (like windowseat) and like getting hyped up about it only to get chided by Kakashi-kun and Sakura while Sasuke looks out nervously over the ocean XD

Where's the mushyness!? U promised me I'd be all mushy towards Kakashi-kun!!! *grabs all kunai and stands menacingly before I burst out laughing*

this was really good! I actually didn't skim it XD Great work, Irena.

Lemme know when your next chapter comes out! Pwetty Pwease!?

~ Mysteria Pearl ~
 
Irena, I know for a fact that you've never traveled via airplane. XD No knives or weapons are allowed on an airplane XD

It's a ninja airplane! LOL XD

And where are the flight attendants? (sp!?)

Not sure.....XD

Where's the mushyness!? U promised me I'd be all mushy towards Kakashi-kun!!! *grabs all kunai and stands menacingly before I burst out laughing*

Later into the fanfic...I promise!

Oh, and all the announcements would have been done on the intercom thingy. And ******'s hardly left the village, much less ever gone onto an airplane! Make him more excited! I can just see him, like a little kid, kneeling on his seat (like windowseat) and like getting hyped up about it only to get chided by Kakashi-kun and Sakura while Sasuke looks out nervously over the ocean XD

Exactly what i was thinking! LOL

this was really good! I actually didn't skim it XD Great work, Irena.

Lemme know when your next chapter comes out! Pwetty Pwease!?

Real soon I promise *is making some changes*

I liked it, but I would have liked if there was more.

Thank you but the next chappie will be longer!

Thank you for all the comments! I will have the next chappie up VERY soon!

~ IM ~
 
its like me and you are on the same page
 
Ooh! I'd like to say one more thing before you like tie me to a pole and burn me XD

could you... I don't know... possibly describe their clothes better?! I wanna hear what Kakashi-kun is wearing!!! XD

~ Mysteria PEarl ~
 
Time for chapter two! Hope you all like it! I had to make some changes, hopefully it meets everyones...expectations! lol XD rated PG - PG 13 (in the middle...I think)

Chapter 2 Room Service and The Mission

****** was sitting on the edge of his seat gazing out into the sea. (like a little kid that just got his first kunai!) Sakura was also gazing out but as her normal self. Sasuke was just sitting…silently like always.

They arrived silently and out of the airport. The village was quiet but nonetheless had a beach. Sakura had her eyes wide at the sight of the place.

Kakashi looked around, “The hotel we are going to be sleeping and living in for the next week or so should be right there.” Kakashi said pointing to a large building that looked rich and expensive.

“Kakashi sensei, where did you get all of this money?” Sakura said.

“Well..” He sweat dropped. “Let’s just go inside and check in.” Kakashi walked in the large building, there was tons of expensive things in it.

“Can I help you?” A young lady with black short hair walked up to Kakashi with a clipboard a piece of paper and a pen in her hand.

“Uh, yes we need a room for each of us.” The girl scribbled something down,

“Names?”

“I am Hatake Kakashi, this is Sakura,” he said pointing to the pink haired girl to his left, “ This is Sasuke and the other is ******.” Kakashi said pointing to the navy haired boy to he right and the blond behind him.

She scribbled down the names, “Would you like a master or grand bedroom for each of you?”

Kakashi looked at Sakura, Sasuke, and ******.

“Will each have a master bedroom.”

She scribbled something else, “Right this way please. Your bedrooms will be right across from each other.”

She walked down a narrow hallway, the walls were a sort of tan with bamboo running up the side and down.

“Here are four cards with your door numbers on it, swipe the card to lock and open it. Your card is the only one besides the maids that can open the door.” She quickly gave them their cards,

“Have a good day Master Kakashi.” She bowed and left in a hurry to see other customers.

Kakashi smiled and waved back at her while she left.

Sakura smirked, “Your weird.”

“I’ll take this one!” ****** shouted grabbing the one card that had his door number on it and ran into the bedroom in front of him.

Sakura took the card that had her number on it and swiped her card. She opened the door and looked into the one she was standing in front of, “Oh my……”

She walked in with her pink suitcase rolling on the ground behind her. Sakura laughed and put her suitcase near her closet and smiled at the mirror in her bathroom. She put her card down on the counter and ran the water and put her hand under to take some to put in her hair. She looked out from the window to see what was the view and you could see the sea and the beach. She ran to her suitcase and brought out her clothes and other various materials she had in there and put them away in brand new looking dressers.

Sasuke picked the one across from Sakura and Kakashi picked the last one. Sasuke swiped his card and opened the door to see that his was like the one when he was home, except more expensive and more... fabulous. He walked over to the bed and put his bag on the bed. He opened his bag and took out HIS clothes and various materials to put away in HIS dresser.

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A little bit later
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Sakura walked out of her room, swiped her card and locked the door. She put the card in her pocket and turned around to see Sasuke also swiping and locking his door and putting his card in his pocket,

“Sasuke! Where are you going?” Sasuke looked at Sakura.

“I’m having a look around.”

“So am I! Want to walk together?”

“No.” He walked past her and out the door.

Sakura frowned and waited till he passed and she walked behind him and they went there separate ways. Sakura walked outside and found the beach.

“AHHHH!” She squealed and she ran to the sand.

The wind started to blow and she sat down on the beach. She looked at the waves, wind blowing her hair. Sasuke walked along the side of the hotel and went to the beach corner. He walked along the beach, hands in his pockets. (Like normal!) Sasuke saw Sakura in deep thought looking out at the sea. He stopped and then walked back to the hotel.

“Sasuke, have you seen Sakura?” Hatake Kakashi asked coming out of his bedroom, swiping his card, locking it and sticking the card into his pocket.

“She was out by the beach last time I saw her.” Sasuke mumbled, swiped his card and went into his room slamming the door behind him.

Kakashi jumped because of the slam but walked out of the fabulous hotel and onto the beach. He saw Sakura still sitting there wind blowing but her headband was off and she was wet.

“Sakura.” Sakura looked up and saw Kakashi coming toward her.

“Kakashi sensei!” She stood up fast grabbing her headband and tying it onto her head.

“Sakura sit back down. Don’t worry.” Kakashi sat with her.

“Kakashi sensei, how did you know I was here?”

“Sasuke said he saw you and he went into his bedroom, slamming the door very loudly…… I know for a fact that you miss Ino, (as if) but tomorrow supposedly every team wanted to take a break and come to different islands. So maybe you will see them tonight or tomorrow. Go back into your room and rest for a little bit, you’ll feel better.”

Kakashi said waiting a few moments until Sakura finally nodded and stood up. Kakashi disappeared and Sakura was left alone walking along the beach. ****** looked out his window to see Sakura walking alone and ran out his door, out of the hotel to her.

“SAKURA!” he yelled stumbling on the sticky sand. “Can I walk you to your room?”

She waited a few moments, “I guess…”

They walked together along the beach back inside the hotel. Sakura got out her card and swiped it. She quickly walked inside and shut the door. ****** stood there for about a minute until he screamed out, “YEA!” ****** smiled and walked back to his own room, swiping his card and walked into his room.

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Later…….
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****** was looking at himself in the mirror (O_o ok ****** has issues) when he heard a knock at the door. ****** ran to the door and opened it,

“Your dinner young master.” A girl said giving him a platter of food and a bowl of ramen.

“AAAAAAA!” He grabbed the platter from the girl and closed the door shut, ran into the kitchen and sat on one of the chairs near a table. (yes…they have a kitchen XD) He grabbed chopsticks that were in a cup and digged into the food.

Sakura heard a knock at the door as well,

“HOLD ON!” Sakura yelled quickly getting up from lying on her bed reading ‘Boys, Can you handle them?’. Sakura ran over to the door and opened it. A girl held a bowl of ramen and food on a platter. She grinned seeing all the food, grabbed the food, slammed the door shut and ran into her kitchen, took chopsticks that were in a cup on her table and started to dig in.

Sasuke heard a knock at the door, he walked over from the window he was staring out of, to the door and opened it to see Sakura holding a platter of food for him.

“Here you go Sasuke!” She gave it to him and left to her room to finish eating. Sasuke took the food and closed the door. He walked over to his table in his kitchen and began to eat the chopsticks in the cup…..

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The next day….yeah
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“Sasuke, Sakura, ******, wake up!” Kakashi yelled at the three doors. Kakashi was wearing a blue aloha shirt (no idea how he got that), jean shorts, normal mask and headband. He looked quite…spiffy! (Not sure if it’s a word, XD)

Sasuke woke up and got his clothes on. He was wearing his normal navy blue shirt and tan shorts. He looked quite normal to be at a fancy hotel.

****** opened his eyes almost immediately and got dressed into a nice orange t-shirt and jean shorts. Sakura woke up and got dressed into a pink tank top and jean shorts. She brushed her short hair and put her headband in. Sakura quickly ran to the door and swiped her card to lock it and wait for everyone else.

Sasuke walked out his door and swiped his card, locked it and stood waiting with Sakura.

****** slowly swiped his card, yawning, and locked it. “Kakashi sensei, what are we doing today?”

“Um..you might want to change.” Kakashi suggested.

Sakura looked up, “What?”

Kakashi smiled, “We are going to go and relax at the beach. Get your bathing suits on.” Kakashi said. “Of course you want to go to the beach right?”

Sakura nodded smiling and ran back in her room and got changed into her pink bikini bathing suit. She quickly grabbed some sunscreen and put it on her, she also grabbed a towel and ran back out locking her door. ****** went back in his room and got out his orange board shorts and put them on and took off his orange shirt, put sunscreen on him and grabbed a towel, locking his door behind him. Sasuke slowly went back to his room and put on blue board shorts, took off his shirt and put on sunscreen, grabbed a towel and locked the door on his way out.

“Well time to go.” Kakashi announced,

“Wait, Kakashi sensei, aren’t you going to wear a bathing suit?”

Kakashi sensei looked at Sakura.

“No I’m just the supervisor for you three.” Kakashi said walking to the front door leading the three ninja’s.

“Sasuke, you look really good.” Sakura whispered to him while walking down the narrow hallway.

Sasuke ignored her and walked on. Sakura, angry went ahead of him, out the door and straight to the beach. ****** flung himself in the water making a belly flop. Sakura put her towel on the sand and ran to the board shop inside the hotel. She ran back outside with her bright pink surfboard and stuck it in the sand.

“SAKURA!”

A girl with blond hair was running up to Sakura,

“Ino? Why are you here?” Sakura asked.

“Well all of the sensei’s thought it would be good to have a vacation so most of the teams will be here and we got picked first! You look really good in the pink Sakura.” Ino said smiling.

“Oh yeah I forgot, you look great in the purple!” Sakura answered and laughed.

“Sasuke is out in the sea. He looks so good.”

Hearts started to fill their eyes. ****** was in the water and got a crab stuck on his nose. Sasuke was just randomly sitting on the edge out in the middle of the sand and the sea.

“My team is inside. They don’t like the sea that well! WHAT WUSSES!!!!!” Ino yelled laughing.

Sakura smiled, grabbed her board and ran into the water. There was a wave coming up and Sakura took it. Ino looked at Sasuke and smiled. Sakura stood on her board. The wave was huge and she went through the tunnel of water like a pro surfer. Sasuke was watching her, not surprised at all, just had a bored look on his face.

****** was clapping, “GO SAKURA!” Sakura smiled and then did a flip in the air and landed on top of the wave. The wave died down real fast and Sakura fell into the water. ******’s smile stopped and then he swam after her.

Sakura smiled laughing, “THAT WAS SO MUCH FUN!”

Sakura laughed so hard she swallowed so much water she had to get on her board to catch her breath and stop coughing. She then saw ****** coming and she just waited for the slow poke to come up to her.

“Hey ******, what are you doing?”

“Can I go with you?”

“Do you have a board?”

“No.”

“Get on. Stand on the middle of the end of the board and make sure you have complete balance, you move and you die.”

****** nodded scardly and got on the board. He got on the board balanced as ever, a wave started to come and Sakura using her hands swam a little close to the wave and stood up.

“Get ready… to die”

Sakura went right onto the wave. Sakura went fast and touched the waves tunnel inside, the water was crystal clear.

“******, HOW ARE YOU DOING BACK THERE?” Sakura yelled behind her.


****** was standing smiling looking around. Sasuke saw the two go right through the wave and the wave stopped and Sakura went forward inches away from a rock when Sasuke jumped in the water and swam as fast as he could trying to save her. Sasuke jumped up and caught her in midair. He jumped on the rock carrying her bridesmaid style. “Sasuke..” She moaned then she blacked out.

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“****** shut up! Don’t wake her you idiot!” Ino yelled.

Sakura shot up panting, “What happened?”

“You blacked out forehead!” Ino said smiling at Sasuke. “Sasuke saved you from hitting the rock over there!” She said pointing to a large mis-shapen rock.

Sasuke was sitting on the sand looking out at a wave coming in, and of course was really wet.

“SHIKAMARU!” Ino yelled seeing Shikamaru coming out from the hotel. “SO YOU ACTUALLY WANT TO COME OUT HERE?”

Shikamaru ran up to the group of people (******, Sakura, and Ino)

“Yeah.” He was wearing black board shorts, no shirt, and hair tied up like normal.

“Neji Hyuuga’s team is supposed to come here. I just heard from Kakashi.”

****** looked at Shikamaru,

“BUSHY EYEBROWS IS SUPPOSED TO COME HERE!?” ****** yelled.

Shikamaru laughed, “Yeah, how troublesome.”

****** laughed and jumped in the water seeing another wave was coming. The wave knocked him over and was soaked. Sakura grabbed her board and ran out to the wave and rode it yet again like a pro.

“She just won’t stop will she?” Ino said looking at Sasuke.

Sasuke finally nodded and went out to the hotel and inside where the shop was for boards.

“I need a board.”

“Well you came to the right place, here ya go youngster!” The man gave Sasuke a board and he went out back to the beach and into the water. He got on his borad and out into the wave that Sakura was riding.

“HEY SASUKE!” Sakura yelled speeding faster than Sasuke was. Sasuke smirked and speed up making it a race, Sakura obveously won.

“Sasuke let me borrow your board!” Ino said coming up to Sasuke who was drenched and tired,

Sasuke gave her his board and she went out to sea and caught up to Sakura, who was waiting for her next opponent.

“Want to race?”

Sakura laughed evil-ly, “Think you can beat me?”

There was another wave coming, “Let’s go.”

Sakura caught the wave and started up it. A tunnel was forming and another wave was right behind that one. Sakura was speeding down the tunnel and touching the wave itself. The wave went bigger and bigger.

“GO SAKURA!” ****** cheered.

Sakura was gaining speed when Ino came up on her.

“THINK I CAN BEAT YOU? CHA! I’LL BEAT YOU!” Ino yelled speeding up past her. More and more ninja academy students came. Kakashi saw the group watching the two speed down the wave.

“Always competitive.” Kakashi said going back into his little orange book of pervertedness.

Sakura was speeding down the wave beating Ino, Ino was a little behind her.

Ino jumped and came ONTOP of the wave, Sasuke looked at the two,

‘They never give up.’ He thought.

Ino stopped and went into the next wave. Sakura flipped up in the air and flipped over and over and landed on top of the wave.

‘She must be using her own chakra into the board and making it speed.’ Sakura thought and then leaned forward, “I’LL USE MY CHAKRA TOO!”

Sakura speed up lightning fast. Sakura smiled and went past Ino and jumped down into the tunnel. She touched the water and laughed. The wave stopped and Ino lost.

“No one can beat me!” Sakura laughed menacingly.

Sakura laughed and smiled. She sat down panting from the Chakra she used and grabbed a towel.

“That was so much fun!”
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Kakashi was reading that little orange book that he loves so much when he saw Asuma and Kurenai coming from another end of the beach. (Sorry If I spelled there names wrong! XD) Kurenai was wearing a nice red and black bathing suit and Asuma was wearing short and an aloha t-shirt,

“YO!” Kakashi yelled at Asuma,

Asuma and Kurenai came up to Kakashi, ‘So you guys are here?” Kurenai said smiling.

Kakashi nodded, “I’m guessing everyone’s teams decided here would be a good place to vacation?”

Asuma laughed, “Some went to another beach but other than that just the Konoha teams and one sand team.”

The teams from Konoha started to come out on the other end of the beach meeting the other teams talking and such. A girl came running up to Kakashi,

“Hello Kakashi Sensei! Did you get the letter?”

Kakashi nodded, “We will start today on the mission.”



Next Chapter will be up soon!

~ IM ~

EDIT: NEXT TIME ON A ****** SUMMER!: OLD PAST, NEW NINJA! HIKARU UCHIHA!
 
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Relatively few mistakes this chapter. I'm really enjoying this story, even if a main conflict hasn't aroused yet.
 
HIKARU UCHIHA?!? WTF?!?

Loved this chapter much more than the first one, and I can't wait for the third one to come out.
 
Sasuke took the food and closed the door. He walked over to his table in his kitchen and began to eat the chopsticks in the cup…..
o_O Eat the chopsticks? I really don't think it's edible.

Okay, thus for once I won't be so picky about the grammar but...the idea is not enough original. I've read another story like this, and I'm not too sure about whether the idea got scrapped.

And to give you a wittle advice:

You'll have to write numbers out. It's against the rules if you just put "112" instead of "one hundred twelve". Otherwise people will think you're lazy.

And to let you know: inserting author's notes meaning put "()" parenthese(sp?) it's not allowed.

Chapter 2 Room Service and The Mission

Aww, you just gave away the hint at the beginning, even though it is at the ending. I personally think that "The Mission" would go at the next chapter.

And the description level is low, try to describe more. What if somoeone who doesn't know the people in ****** reads this? It's good to give exact detail, maybe not too exact...

I've read it and it seems to be all coming into a blur. Things just happen to rapidly...happen. It's kinda choppy and such, so try to explain things and all.

Well, the beach thing is not so much of an original idea, so try make it your own, and if the owner of the idea gave you the permission. Then...that's a different story.
 
SUPER MONDO AWESOMENESSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!! Eagerly awaiting the next chappie! ^^
 
a couple of mistakes

Kakashi wouldn't jump at the sound of a slamming door.

there is no need to swipe your card in order for your door to lock. It locks automatically.

“Your weird.”
It should be "You're weird"

“HOLD ON!” Sakura yelled quickly getting up from lying on her bed reading ‘Boys, Can you handle them?’. Sakura ran over to the door and opened it. A girl held a bowl of ramen and food on a platter. She grinned seeing all the food, grabbed the food, slammed the door shut and ran into her kitchen, took chopsticks that were in a cup on her table and started to dig in.
Sasuke heard a knock at the door, he walked over from the window he was staring out of, to the door and opened it to see Sakura holding a platter of food for him.
“Here you go Sasuke!” She gave it to him and left to her room to finish eating. Sasuke took the food and closed the door. He walked over to his table in his kitchen and began to eat the chopsticks in the cup…..
This makes no sense. Sakura is in her room... then she's near Sasuke's... and then she's just like magically back in her room 0_o

me likey Kakashi-kun's outfit!!! Spiffy is good!!! (needs to be tighter, though XD)

Sasuke should put sunscreen on in like a war-paint / football pattern XD

Ino uses the word "good" too much! have her more descriptive. Hot. Sizzlin'. Tangy. WOW. that kinda thing! and there should be more gazing at the beach hotties

??? scare is a word. how about, "He stood on the board, seeming very unstable and scared" it sounds better.

Ino said smiling at Sasuke.
it should be, "Ino sneered; but when noticing she had gotten Sasuke's attention, she grinned like a ninny in his direction."

****** shut up! Don’t wake her you idiot!” Ino yelled.
uh... I'm pretty sure that when a person whites out (oh there I go with the pokemon games again) their friends would do anything to wake them up.

“Yeah.” He was wearing black board shorts, no shirt, and hair tied up like normal.
ha! I read that wrong! XD I read, "He was holding a black board and wearing no shorts." Haha! That was a really funny double take I just did! XD haha! *laughs until I snort* you should really have like Ino pull his hair down

the whole board thing... it would probably be a rent shop, right? I mean nobody would just hand you a board. They cost $$$ and where would you use it / put it!? Also, Sasuke should get more fluttered and embarassed and the dude should ask him about what kind of stuffhe wants on his board XD

“HEY SASUKE!” Sakura yelled speeding faster than Sasuke was. Sasuke smirked and speed up making it a race, Sakura obveously won.

...race; Sakura, obviously winning, cheered in joy.

...race, leaving Sakura the weaner... er... winner XD

I like the second one XD

pervertedness

'Scuse me!? this is like G to pg. there could be little kids reading this! EDIT THAT!!! It's very, VERY innapropriate (sp!?)

“YO!” Kakashi
nope. not in his vocabulary. maybe a "hey" and a "poof" but no "YO!" It's purely Keshi's thing XD

All over all, another good chapter!! Good job!!! I'd be more descriptive, but I'm half asleep XD

~ Mysteria Pearl ~
 
Thank you all for the comments! Before I put up chapter three, I did think of this up when I was bored one day so everything isn't going to be perfect or great. It's just my imagination, I type fast and I misspell things so I'm sorry if some things don't make sense!

Here it is the long awaited Chapter Three! Rated PG - PG 13 (in the middle...I think)


Chapter Three:OLD PAST, NEW NINJA!! Hikaru Uchiha!!

A semi-tan shy girl with purple hair and a lavender bikini with strings on the end, walked up to ******.

“N-******,” she said walking up to ******.

“Hey Hinata!” ****** said smiling.

Hinata the shy caring stalker of ******, blushed sixteen billion shades of red, walked away and sat down by herself on the sticky sandy beach.

Kiba, the boy with a dog named Akamaru, sat on a desolated spot with Akamaru far from the others.

“Hey Sakura. You were great out there!” A boy with bowl cut black hair and dark green board shorts ran up to Sakura handing her a towel.

“Lee, would you like to race me?” Sakura the pink haired maniac who is crazy over Sasuke, asked smiling at him.

“Sure!” Lee said using the ‘Gai-sensei’ pose and grabbed a random board. He grabbed Sakura’s board and handed it to her.

“Let’s go!”

They both ran to catch a wave and they started to race.

Tenten, the girl who can hit any target right in the middle, watched Lee and Sakura race. Neji, the boy who feels like a caged bird and have sort of a curse on him, nearby.

“Look over there. Who’s that talking to Hatake Kakashi Sensei?” Ino asked. She was with Shikamaru, a boy with an I.Q of over two hundred points.

Gaara, the blood thirsty sand demon, was standing near Temari, the girl with a really huge fan that have really fast winds.

Sasuke, the boy who’s clan go killed by his brother Itachi, was just sitting on the beach bored out of his mind.

They all looked at her. She had a light green bikini on with strings at both ends of either side of the bottoms, her brown hair flaring out from her headband on her head, and brownish-black eyes that shimmered when she was walking in the sun.

“SASUKE!” she yelled, as she jumped on Sasuke and hugged him. “I haven’t seen you in such a long time!”

Sakura and Lee were walking up the beach from getting a little surfing done when she looked at this girl who was on Sasuke and asked, “Who are you and why are you hugging my Sasuke?”

“I’m Hikaru Uchiha, and he is not your Sasuke,” Hikaru said.

Ino, Shikamaru, Hinata, Sakura, Lee, Tenten, Gaara, Kiba, Temari, Sasuke, and Neji all were shocked and surprised.

“But, I thought that your clan all died!” Sakura said looking at him.

“Hikaru…” Sasuke whispered.

Hikaru giggled and jumped off Sasuke.

“Yep, that’s my name. My sisters and I left and went into hiding for about seven years! I hope you would have remembered me, but I don’t look the same since I was five and a half!” Hikaru giggled. Sasuke was stunned, Hikaru smiled,

“Don’t you remember? I was standing by you every time you needed someone, Sasuke.”

Sakura grinned, “Do you live in a village?”

“I live in Village hidden in Waterfall, and for my two other sisters one lives in Village Hidden in the Mist and the other Village Hidden in the Sand. My two sisters are in the hotel. So, Sasuke, want to surf together?” Hikaru asked.

“Uh..Sure…” Sasuke said, grabbing Lee's board from him when he came up to them.
Hikaru grabbed a green board and ran out into the sea.

“Know how to surf?” Hikaru asked. Sasuke nodded slowly but it was a nod none the less.

“Let’s go!”

Hikaru yelled getting a big wave. Sasuke got ready and stood up and so did Hikaru. The wave came up and Sasuke and Hikaru were lifted ontop the crystal clear water. Hikaru yelled out in joy and happiness as she flipped through the wave and had a huge gleaming rin on her face,

“Having fun?!?” Hikaru yelled.

Sasuke nodded. Sasuke looked at Hikaru who was in front of him.

‘I never even remember her. She seems a little familiar. Hikaru..Hikaru..Hikaru…’

|FLASHBACK|

“Coming Sasuke?” asked a little girl who had short brown hair and a red t-shirt that covered a little over her tan shorts.

The little boy who a little taller than herand was wearing a nice blue shirt and navy shorts that sort of matched nodded and followed her down outside. They ran up to a large playground and Hikaru laughed.

“Want to swing?” she asked.

Sasuke nodded and the two walked over to the swing holding hands and they swung together.

|END FLASHBACK|

Sasuke and Hikaru were riding the wave with speed.

Sasuke started to smile and perk up. Hikaru smiled back and the wave started to crash into the beach and they slowed down and came to a stop crashing into the water.

Sasuke looked at Hikaru. She was soaking wet and she smiled.

Sasuke and Hikaru went back to the beach still smiling at each other and Sakura and Ino were angry with Hikaru.

“She is stealing my man, right Ino?” Sakura asked.

Ino nodded and then stopped. “YOUR MAN!?” Ino yelled.

“YEAH, MY MAN!” Sakura exclaimed.

“Ino, just stop, it’s troublesome to fight,” Shikamaru said looking at her.

“Well, that’s true, such a trouble shouldn’t be wasted on such a lonely forehead girl,” Ino said.

Sakura yelled, “YOU TAKE THAT BACK!”

Hikaru laughed, “Are they always like this?”

Sasuke nodded,“Hn? Yeah.”

Hikaru laughed and hugged Sasuke, “I missed you so much!”

Sasuke blushed a little.

“So did I,” he mumbled.

‘CHA! I HATE HER!’ inner Sakura yelled as she saw Hikaru and her ‘lovy dovy’ act.

“Really, Sakura, you should focus less on Sasuke and more on me!” Ino said looking at Sakura. “Sakura, what?” Sakura was looking at the two.

Sasuke was talking incessantly to Hikaru, she giggled and then hugged Sasuke one last time, then waved.

She walked back into the hotel and disappeared from everyone’s sight.

“Ino, ever wonder if Sasuke loves Hikaru?”

“HEL-LO?! Hikaru is Sasuke’s sister, that would be just….nasty if they got together!” Ino explained walking off back to her team.

Sasuke looked at Sakura and glared.

Sakura smiled and waved, “SASUKE!” Sakura ran over to him. He brushed her off and walked back to the hotel, as well.

It was mid-day, Hikaru and Sasuke walked out of the hotel, Hikaru whispering something in his ear and then both of them laughed.

Ino and Shikamaru were out on the waves trying to beat each other…again.

Hinata and ****** were talking.

Gaara and Temari were using the sand to create new jutsu's.

Sakura, Lee, Tenten, Kiba, and Neji were all playing vollyball on the beach laughing and having fun until they all saw the pair walk out.

“Hey, guys! What are you doing?” Hikaru asked, everyone ignored her.

****** looked up and gave Sasuke an evil glare.

‘******,’ Hinata thought.

Hinata got up and walked along the beach a little until ****** followed after her, then they both walked along the beach together.

Neji looked at Hinata’s disappearing body along the shore and walked away into the hotel.

Sasuke and Hikaru were both in shock that everyone was ignoring them.

Hikaru walked over to Sakura and Sakura just ignored her.

“Sakura, want to race?” Hikaru asked, looking at the pink haired girl who was wet and quite tan.

“Sakura?” Hikaru, looked at Sasuke, “I think I’m going to back into the hotel. Don’t wait up for me okay? Bye, Sasuke-niisan.”

She walked back towards the hotel and then disappeared from everyone’s sight.

Sasuke looked at Sakura, “Idiot.”

Sasuke walked past her and went into the hotel.

“Hikaru?” Sasuke asked, as he looked at each of the doors inside.

He heard whispering in the room next to his. He pressed his ear to the door and heard Hikaru and another girl.

“Hikaru, you shouldn’t really go off talking to Sasuke. We are supposed to be escorted by them sooner or later.”

“Yes, Kito,” Hikaru said.

“Please do not run off and then just go back here like that. They might think you are up to something,” Kito said, worried, “I must go and talk to Kakashi. He doesn’t know I’m here yet.”

Kito opened the door to find Sasuke on the floor to the right of the door. She nodded and walked over to Kakashi’s door.

“Kakashi, my love. I'm here!” she said.

Kakashi opened the door. He was holding his little orange book of pervertedness…yet again.

“Kito, I thought you weren’t supposed to be here for quite a while,” He said in a low tone.

Kito laughed, “Well, I missed you! How far are you in the book? Of course I finished the whole series.”

“Come in, Kito. How is Tekamere?”

“She is good!”

She walked inside Kakashi’s room. Kakashi locked the door and there was complete silence.

Hikaru opened the door and found Sasuke.

“Oh, Sasuke, it’s you. I mean, hi.”

Hikaru was distraught and she went back inside of her room.

Sasuke looked at the floor and stood up. He went to his room and closed the door. He looked outside his window and he looked at the sky.

It was still noon and he wanted to go and still waste the day. He walked out onto the wndowsill and ontop of the roof. He sat down and sighed, Sasuke looked up.

“Enjoying this?” Sakura asked as she jumped on to the roof, “So, what’s up with you and Hikaru? I thought the Uchiha clan was, you know.”

Sasuke looked at Sakura who was sitting down next to him.

“Shut up,” Sasuke said.

Sakura smiled, “Still as stubborn as ever.”

Sasuke’s eyes grew wide. Sakura jumped off the roof and landed in the sand. Sasuke saw that Ino was fighting against Temari and they were using chakra and special jutsu's. Sasuke sat there watching the fight until he saw Hikaru and the " Kito" girl. Kito was with Kakashi and Hikaru was with-

“******!” Sasuke said, standing up.

****** was talking to her.

Neji came out of his window and found Sasuke glaring at ******.

“Am I interrupting your evil glare?” Neji teased, “I know you are jealous. Hikaru is also a shinobi, but far better than all of us," Neji said staring at Hikaru, "she is just like Kakashi. Hikaru, she isn’t like the rest of us. She is worse. She has chakra in her I can’t see, even with byakugun.”

Sasuke looked at Hikaru down in the sand talking with ****** laughing about something.

Neji sweat dropped and laughed, “That’s why, huh?” Neji smirked and looked at Sasuke.

“Why, what?”

Neji smirked again and stood up, “You like miss Hikaru, don’t you. It’s kind of sick and wrong to like your sister but I did that with Hinata when we were little and I didn’t know any better.”

Sasuke was silent.

****************
Down by the beach…..
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****** laughed, “It’s funny, isn’t it?”

Hikaru was laughing so much she had to sit down on the sand.

“******, that was hilarious!” Hikaru jumped back up and gave him a hug.

****** blushed as red as a cherry, maybe redder, no one can tell……seriously it’s that red.

“You really shouldn’t hug him. He gets idiotic with love,” Sakura smiled at Hikaru who was still hugging him.

Hikaru jumped off ****** and he melted into a puddle.

“Really, ******, get yourself together!” Sakura said, having an angry tone.

Sasuke took out his kunai and jumped from the roof, Neji followed after him.

“Neji, don’t follow me!” Sasuke warned.

Neji stopped and fell to the sand.

“Neji!” Hinata yelled, shesaw him fall from the roof and ran after him.

Temari just laughed.

“This ought to be good,” said Gaara, who was straight faced and waiting for what Sasuke might do.

“Sensei!” Sakura yelled, as sheran to Hatake Kakashi who was still wearing his shorts and aloha t-shirt, “Sensei, aren’t you going to go in the water?”

Kakashi just looked up at her and shook his head, “I don’t think you would like to see me out there. Besides you all need relaxation...”

Sakura sweat dropped and ran out to the beach, put out her towel and laid there. ****** was still in a puddle from Hikaru hugging him and he was still as red as a cherry.

Sasuke jumped in front of Hikaru and grabbed her hand.

“Sasuke…” she said, as Sasuke and Hikaru disappeared.

“Hikaru!” ****** yelled, into the distance.

“She isn’t coming back for a while. We all know that.”

****** looked at Sakura, “huh?”

“Sasuke was jealous of you ******. Sasuke saw you hugging Hikaru and since he has feelings for her, he naturally took her and disappeared,” Sakura said, as standing up, and she looked around.

“Why would he have feelings for her?” ****** sighed.

“******, seriously, think about it. They have been together for a long time and have caught up with each other and we all need some ‘love’ in our life. ******," ****** was running up to the hotel and breaking down doors, trying to find Sasuke and Hikaru, "******, ******!” Sakura yelled.

****** looked back to see Sakura fuming and he just laughed, “I guess I should just wait!”

“DUH!” Sakura yelled.

Kakashi looked up from his book and walked over leaving Kito.

“What’s the problem, Sakura?”

“Well, ****** was hugging Hikaru and Sasuke saw, I guess, from somewhere and then he just flew down to her, grabbed her and then disappeared. ****** wanted to find them and started to tear apart the place,” Sakura said, watching ****** falling down the stairs of the hotel.

“Sakura, Hikaru is not just a shinobi, but an elite shinobi. She isn’t like us. I heard Neji talking with Sasuke on the rooftop. Neji knows of what I’m going to say but don’t say this to anyone but Hikaru herself,” Kakashi said. Sakura nodded in agreement.

~~

Well that's it! Hopefully everyone liked it and enjoyed it! Chapter four will be out soon!

~ IM ~
 
How come when u introduced a character, u said some side note about them. Like "TenTen, the girl who can hit any target right in the middle". I think it would've been better if u describe it like "TenTen, a female ninja part of Lee's group who was known for remarkable aim and precision"

Other than that, I like the plot so far, and are Hikaru and Sasuke really bro/sis? If so, wouldn't that mean everyone in the Uchica Clan was bro and sis since they would have to in breed?
 
incessantly
do you mean innocently?
Hikaru is Sasuke’s sister, that would be just….nasty if they got together
if that were true, and they were related that closely, I woundn't read another single chapter. If there's any WHATSOEVER brother-sister shipping, I will NOT stand for it. Also, remember to give me the credit for MY original characters. I made them up so you really ought to give me the credit, doncha think? (plus, they're both already in 2 fics of mine)

you absolutely need to chance Sasuke x the OC version of you. either that or warn at the beginning of chapters, drop down to like 1 star and raise it up to like R.

the plot is good. Kakashi is hot. XD You're a good writer, duh, I know that oh-so well, cuz, duh, I've seen your other great works. I know you can do better than this!!! You're a wonderful writer with a great imagination!!!

~ Mysteria Pearl ~
 
Dang, another good chapter! 20/10! Awesome! (Yes, it really was that good.)

MP: Aw c'mon, those shippings aren't that bad, are they? (Look at me, I've got Uchihacest claimed, and that's even worse. XD) You shouldn't be so hard on her. ><;

I-chan: Also, if you want, I'll revise your chapters after you type them so the grammar and spelling is good?
 
MP: Aw c'mon, those shippings aren't that bad, are they? (Look at me, I've got Uchihacest claimed, and that's even worse. XD) You shouldn't be so hard on her. ><;

yes. they are bad. when sisters and brothers get together, genes get messed up with their children. I will not have Irena support it, nor will I. It's a disgrace and I'm simply appauled. I amd hard on her becuase she's my real-life best friend and she knows how wrong that is.

still a wonderful fic, as far as the plot goes (becuase, duh, I already know the plot.)

~ MP ~
 
Oops, forgot about that part...*Ahem* I'll leave now before I get killed...

P.S. Still a great fic! 8D
 
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