-
Be sure to join the discussion on our discord at: Discord.gg/serebii
***** person
- Thread starter mangaeyes
- Start date
Atari
Did it on 'em
Is he floating?
Facing him, the left arm is a bit longer than the other, and it kind of looks like it's just flopping there. That probably could have been fixed with... A little eraser.
On the positive side, I really like the textures you used for the shirt, and especially for the jeans. The shading is fine as well, although there is no obvious light source.
Facing him, the left arm is a bit longer than the other, and it kind of looks like it's just flopping there. That probably could have been fixed with... A little eraser.
On the positive side, I really like the textures you used for the shirt, and especially for the jeans. The shading is fine as well, although there is no obvious light source.
flame master 14
What?!
Besides the arm thing, i think the legs might be too short as well. I also must agree that the clothing textures you used worked out really well. All in all this is a really good pic.
Okay this person is tall but he is tall because he has a long body and quite stubby legs. Keeping in mind the legs are supposed to be stubby, is the anatomy of body-legs okay?
Also I notice the left arm now. Its horrible and the hand is wierd on the left arm (is the hand okay on the right arm?) Also are the clothing folds okay?
Also I notice the left arm now. Its horrible and the hand is wierd on the left arm (is the hand okay on the right arm?) Also are the clothing folds okay?
flame master 14
What?!
Ooohhh. You failed to mention that before. Yeah, the legs look pretty good, in that case. the right hand does look a bit... funky, but I think it has something to do with the fingers being to pointy. Also, it seems to be the same width as the rest of his arm, and hands are usually wider. This may, however, be due to the angle at which the hand is shown.
kirby8933083
mai husbando
Stubby legs eh? Nothing wrong with that. Well I think the reason it looks so disproportionate is that the legs in addition to being short his legs are slender and his torso isn't similar in that way. And the edge of the shirt, I'm not a fan of all the ruffles. With the the several ruffles you have there it sort of gives the illusion that it is simply hanging off of him which doesn't work with how the shirt looks on the upper half of his torso. Maybe just one or two to show the shirts spare fabric, but this just looks like all too much. All other things I see have already been said, the arm. 
Not bad though I'll admit.
Not bad though I'll admit.Okay more excuses from me but...
The jeans are skinny jeans and so the shirts tend to kinda hang over them. I agree 100% I can't do clothing folds at all and they look really wierd but thats why they're there.
Thank-you for your help everyone I'll try another one soon with all your cc in mind!
The jeans are skinny jeans and so the shirts tend to kinda hang over them. I agree 100% I can't do clothing folds at all and they look really wierd but thats why they're there.
Thank-you for your help everyone I'll try another one soon with all your cc in mind!
flame master 14
What?!
That's what it's all about. Giving and getting help is why we're all here, right?
Who Said Pikachu?
Pikachu Spotter
Well yeah, start with the obvious, arm is too long. But somehow no one mentioned why. Stand up and arms to your sides, fingertips only reach down your thighs, right? With the high waist of your dude (covered by the shirt somewhat) your lovely young man has his fingertips at his knees, thusly gorilla arms and it looks off. Well, gorilla minus the muscle and what not.. and hair.. and whatever, you get what I mean.
Fold on the bottom of your shirt are too tight and remind me of the bottom of drapes which is why that's also looking a bit funny. Loosen up the folds only go for a couple. Also, if it's that loose on the front give more room on the sides as well to even it out.
You've got the loose fitting on waist and arms but the collar's sitting perfect on his neck, bring the shirt a little higher off the skin, it'll make it look less painted on. Even if you've got thin material (unless it's like lycra or something else plastic and sweaty) it should sit off the skin a little. Adds a bit of depth and what not.
I do like the shading and the depth you've done with the shoulder/arm/sleeves, especially on his left side. It's quite nice.
Jeans!
You mentioned in reply to one of the other posts that he's got tight jeans, you've got much too many fabric folds and in odd places for that. Wear some jeans! ..actually, it'd be easier to just google image some images of jeans, (tight fit if that's what your going for) and see just how things hang off the body and where creases and folds actually sit. Generally they're at the crotch/knees/folds from the cuffs/maaaybe from the belt loops. You should have mostly smooth unbroken lines along the legs themselves with all the texturing at the bottom/crotch.. and well, knees, but your guy's facing us so that's not going to happen so much and with tight jeans it's likely to be smooth with a straight leg anyway.
I'm not quite sure what's going on with the jeans at his ankles.. they're kinda bunching like slacks, though I'm assuming it's more they're ment to be bunching on his shoes, yes? Mn. I don't wear jeans in that style (yay flairs) so I'm not so familiar and can't comment so much.. bother. Like I said earlier, picture references are your friend.
His belt/chain thing hanging off his side needs a visible backing, as it's sitting it looks kind of cut in half. You should be able to see some of how it loops around his waist with how it's positioned and such.
Overall you've got a nice enough picture. It's all very serene and peaceful, calm sort of affair and what not. I like his face, can't find any faults with it (and that sounds negative, bother). Head in general's all good and yes.
Maybe a bit more of a dynamic pose next time.. Though reading the personality so far maybe that doesn't suit him so much? Still, even quiet people have their moments and compositions they can sit in to look more lively/interesting and what not.
Anywho, nicely done, not seen any of your other work so can't compare how it goes with your other stuff. Hope I don't sound too hard through that. I write long crits stating my opinion and such, so yes.
Hope something helped!
Draw more!
~WSP
Fold on the bottom of your shirt are too tight and remind me of the bottom of drapes which is why that's also looking a bit funny. Loosen up the folds only go for a couple. Also, if it's that loose on the front give more room on the sides as well to even it out.
You've got the loose fitting on waist and arms but the collar's sitting perfect on his neck, bring the shirt a little higher off the skin, it'll make it look less painted on. Even if you've got thin material (unless it's like lycra or something else plastic and sweaty) it should sit off the skin a little. Adds a bit of depth and what not.
I do like the shading and the depth you've done with the shoulder/arm/sleeves, especially on his left side. It's quite nice.
Jeans!
You mentioned in reply to one of the other posts that he's got tight jeans, you've got much too many fabric folds and in odd places for that. Wear some jeans! ..actually, it'd be easier to just google image some images of jeans, (tight fit if that's what your going for) and see just how things hang off the body and where creases and folds actually sit. Generally they're at the crotch/knees/folds from the cuffs/maaaybe from the belt loops. You should have mostly smooth unbroken lines along the legs themselves with all the texturing at the bottom/crotch.. and well, knees, but your guy's facing us so that's not going to happen so much and with tight jeans it's likely to be smooth with a straight leg anyway.
I'm not quite sure what's going on with the jeans at his ankles.. they're kinda bunching like slacks, though I'm assuming it's more they're ment to be bunching on his shoes, yes? Mn. I don't wear jeans in that style (yay flairs) so I'm not so familiar and can't comment so much.. bother. Like I said earlier, picture references are your friend.
His belt/chain thing hanging off his side needs a visible backing, as it's sitting it looks kind of cut in half. You should be able to see some of how it loops around his waist with how it's positioned and such.
Overall you've got a nice enough picture. It's all very serene and peaceful, calm sort of affair and what not. I like his face, can't find any faults with it (and that sounds negative, bother). Head in general's all good and yes.
Maybe a bit more of a dynamic pose next time.. Though reading the personality so far maybe that doesn't suit him so much? Still, even quiet people have their moments and compositions they can sit in to look more lively/interesting and what not.
Anywho, nicely done, not seen any of your other work so can't compare how it goes with your other stuff. Hope I don't sound too hard through that. I write long crits stating my opinion and such, so yes.
Hope something helped!
Draw more!
~WSP
BaconBoy914
Well-Known Member
... What ***** style is that supposed to be?
kirby8933083
mai husbando
Ok, the girl head shot is pretty darn good. :] The jawline does seem rather steep, just a tiny bit too angled imo. Also the right side her lips look odd the way they are curled, but it would look odd as well without that detail. Ok, now I could have seen a tiny bit of 'ruffling' on the neck of her shirt. It still looks perfectly fine without it, but maybe just one little fold. You very much did a good job on this picture Mangaeyes.
Thank you Kirby! I did think about doing some clothing folds but I thought jackets kinda just hang down cos there usually quite thick. I tried making the lips curly because its Avril Lavigne and she has those sort of lips but it did go kinda wrong...
I can't thank you enough for that constructive critisism you just gave me it is really going to help! What exactly do you mean by 'what ***** style is that'?
TurtwigFan1
burning it down
The boy looks lopsided to me but the girl looks really good. Nice colour and really well-drawn.
Rayquaza Master777
#1 May Fanboy
For the next picture, how about a tall boy with shoulder length blond hair (based on me). He can wear a shirt with a Rayquaza on it!
Anyway, I love the pictures so far!
Anyway, I love the pictures so far!
flame master 14
What?!
This pic looks really good. However, I must agree that her mouth looks a bit...odd. Not necessarily a bad odd, but odd all the same. Actually, she looks like she's about to start crying. If that was the feeling intended in this picture then I can see it working. I also agree that the shirt collar could use a ruffle or two.
Really? Cool. How far? Good luck in your new place and don't lose anything during the move.
Really? Cool. How far? Good luck in your new place and don't lose anything during the move.