Winter can't come soon enough
You know, this might not really have anything to do with the chapter, but this totally made me wonder if folks from big cities actually hate them. Like, I grew up in a small town and finished grade school sequestered in the mountains, and I'm the opposite. I can't stand cities. I've always assumed people like the "peace and quiet."Pewter girl that she is, the Lavender quiet strikes her as unnerving, and she's glad to hear it broken.
Also, even though Fuji's house is technically inhabited, you totally nail the "plucky young girls approach a decrepit, possibly haunted building and linger by the door," scene that horror movies use in spades. Bravo! Except from there we have Mr. Fuji, who seems like a genuine nice guy. His Origins incarnation sprang to mind within just a few lines of his introduction. Not sure if that was your inspiration, but that's what I got. Not surprised that the breach experiments were the whole "we undertook this with the best of intentions" kind of mantra. Isn't that how most scientific craziness starts out?
So, forgive me, but I'm going to nitpick for a moment here, since this is the Mew/Mewtwo backstory thing. I get what you're going for with "plastic DNA," but that might not have been the best pick. I seem to recall plasticity is a term that's generally reserved for nerve cells as opposed to DNA (neuroplasticity), or for phenotypes (expressed traits) instead of genotypes (the DNA coding for them). "Fluid" or "manipulable" might sell the point across better... at least to folks like me. XPAfter a fashion. We obtained a specimen and its DNA was … remarkable. So plastic. Unformed, almost; a nudge here and there and it could have developed into any number of other pokémon.
Also, Mewtwo's a stalker. Because of course he is. *in before Jax starts talking about murdercats* Jokes aside, the "Mewtwo's just lonely" bit has certainly been done before, I think. But what makes your explanation work so well is the fact that, rather than having Mewtwo be created as a clone or the world's strongest Pokémon or what have you, its instead an attempt to exercise control over an otherworldly phenomenon. And that creates a different set of standards and puts a bit more of a gray shade to the whole "Mewtwo's just a tool" thing that clouded its creation.
I was wondering if he was gonna say that. And frankly I'm inclined to believe it.“The League won't help you. I wonder if Giovanni really has gone rogue, or if they're just saying that to distance themselves from what he's doing. Wouldn't put it past them.”
You know sh*t's going down when the robotic narration finally gains some color. Also, I'm calling famous last words on the whole "Artemis is safe if Emilia goes public." All of my NOPE sensors are on full tilt for that bit.And, in the end, and with all due consideration and respect to all parties involved – f*ck the League, right?
Of course it is. Schizophrenia is not something easily diagnosable. The DSM can create whatever guidelines it wants to, but ultimately the biggest problem with psychiatric illnesses is that there's just an arbitrary element to actually diagnosing them. And that's what can make the experience incredibly hard for people who are high-functioning enough to realize there's something wrong but not feel like it's within their power to do anything to change it. Which is a roundabout way of saying, yes, this is totally the right way to go about presenting this stuff and I think you do a very good job with it. If that makes sense.It's hard to pick the right words.
Okay, now I want to know what Kantan is and how it differs from English. Is it a Japanese dialect? This is important, dang it! <.<;
As for the ending, that was pure mind screw and I have no idea what to make of it. I think it was more MissingNo stuff? The spire made me think of MissingNo's stereotypical depiction, and the flat photoshopped think at the end brought the ghost sprite to mind. Otherwise, I'm stumped, but I'm sure it'll get followed up on.